Naxx-Ja (REDONE!!!)

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Basic
Information~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Name: Naxx-Ja

Alias (optional): Ja

Gender: Male

Age: 14

Bending Power: Fire

Allegiances: Rouge, runs a criminal organization in the Fire Nation capitol

Family Members(Optional): Harua (Girlfreind)14, Haru (son) 4 months

Birth Date(Optional): Winter solstice

Extra Information: Do not offer cheese. He will burn you to hell and back again.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Appearance~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Appearance: Short, purple hair, very fidgitey

Height: 5'2

Weight: 90 pounds

Body Type: Short, skinny, very scarred.

Extra Feature: just below the left eye is a cut going down to his chin.

Voice: Surprisingly low and gruff

Extra Clothing/Gear: Vest, whip, sabre, vest, day pack

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Persona~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Personality: Some define it as evil, others define as heroic, it depends on what end of his blade you wind up on. Very tempered, easy to anger and will do almost everything if you offer the right price.

Likes: Reptiles, blood, his girlfreind

Dislikes: Cheese, squirrles, water

Goals: Dominate the fire nation's underground

Fears: Waterbenders

Strength: Attack, speed

Weakness: defense, even faster opponents

Extra Information: can be humorous, but always laugh at his jokes. OR ELSE.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~History~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

History: As a boy, his parents were lost to the secret police as they were fleeing the Fire nation to avoid conscription to the northern Water Tribe. He has since grown up on the streets of the Fire Nation, raised by various criminals and ruffians. The most notable, Hamu Tar, at the time the biggest crime lord around.

He had earned himself a good girlfriend, Harua, who he met after saving her from a rival gang wandering within Naxx's territory. The two often go too far with happy time. He now controls a smuggling ring that Naxx founded and grew over the years by doing side jobs like assassinations, hit and runs, espionage, muggings, and robbery. Recently, a nameless 'client' has hired Naxx-Ja to hunt down and kill Mattias, for reasons she has not yet told Naxx.

The smuggling ring has not only sent assassins and scouts to the Earth kingndom (Mattias's last known location), But Naxx-Ja has gone himself. Brutally torturing, killing and mugging people for information, even the villages here have learned to fear the name 'Ja'. After 'interrogating' a specific induvidual, Naxx has now tracked Mattias to an earthbender underground complex, waiting to strike.

need more history. Why were the parents fleeing, who exactly raised you, who is your girlfriend? how did you meet? How did you start your smuggling ring/gain control of it?

no prob. How's that?

There is a two paragraph minimum needed... I'd say you have about 1/2-2/3ish.

There. Good?

Would you care to include why you are hunting Mattias? Were you hired? Personal vendetta? other?

I thought that was in there...


But yes, hired. By a 'nameless client'. I will reveal who later along the plot.

You still need more. Although you give us a little bit, be more descriptive, and give more background. Although you may know your character, this is for others to understand better.

alright, then. I'll make it longer.

approved...

sorry for being abscent, but thenks! I won't mess up like last time.